Sure you know how to love.

[Mango IngawayParticipant 2264]

So here’s a poem I wrote, please forgive any mistakes since english isn’t my native language.

Sure you know how to love

So you say you wanted someone to love,
Who’d fit you like a glove, a good bloke
Though you only expected someone to feed your ego with a kind stroke
You traded pretty smiles to maintain him in the misery in which he dove

You said you knew how you would love him,
Yet your heart was nowhere to be seen
Too busy too see him, crying, shattered,
Too selfish to even care about his ruin

You left like autumn, leaving all that lived now dead
The fruits have now fallen and rotten
Though unlike your sour afterstate, they’ll be forgotten

You only knew how to be loved,
You were too busy smelling the flowers of his favours
To realize that love has to be requited

That’s it, can you give me your opinions, I’m trying to improve my writing skills, so if you could give me a note/10 or something so I can get an idea, that’d be great.
Don’t feel obliged to give good notes, all constructive criticism is welcome !

It is a common failing of childhood to think that if one makes a hero out of a demon the demon will be satisfied.

[Mango IngawayParticipant 2264]

Just saw that I f~~~ed up a rhyme in the second verse, I’ll pay more attention next time..

It is a common failing of childhood to think that if one makes a hero out of a demon the demon will be satisfied.

[RoyDalParticipant]

She takes. He gives. And the cycle repeats until he wises up and walks.

Society asks MGTOWs: Why are you not making more tax-slaves?

[DeepInThoughtParticipant 2710]

RoyDal wrote:

She takes. He gives. And the cycle repeats until he wises up and walks.

 

Sounds legit 🙂

 

[Sam RavenParticipant 181]

The only thing I trust in this world is a big machine gun and a million rounds of ammunition…

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